Yesterday at 1:30 p.m., an Amtrak train called the Colonial near Chase, Md. collided with three Conrail locomotives on a switch that merges four tracks into two. The amtrak was hit by the Conrail, when it ran the stop sign, while going northbound.
Don't start with your lead with the "when" or "where" of a story. Start with the most important and interesting info, generally the "what" and/or "who" of the story.
In your second sentence, it's not clear which train ran the stop sign. Capitalize Amtrak.
Don't start with your lead with the "when" or "where" of a story. Start with the most important and interesting info, generally the "what" and/or "who" of the story.
ReplyDeleteIn your second sentence, it's not clear which train ran the stop sign. Capitalize Amtrak.
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